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the tables shows the percentage of family spending on different areas in five countries

the tables shows the percentage of family spending on different areas in five countries
The table provides some background information
of
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the
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family spending in five countries
at
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 2020. The information covers eating and drinking, housing, clothing
as well as
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 entertainment. From France to German, there was a decrease in the percentage of
people
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 who spend their
time
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on
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eating from 25
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percent
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per cent
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 to 22
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percent
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per cent
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.
After
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this
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,
figuers
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figures
figure
 went up and down for
UK
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the UK
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, Turkey and Spain. 31
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percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 in France spend their
time
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 on clothing. Figuers
then
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 rose 33 and 37
percent
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 in
German
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 and
UK
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the UK
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.
However
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, there was a significant decrease in both Turkey and Spain.
People
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 in
Germwn
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German
Germany
 spend 15
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percent
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per cent
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 of their
time
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 on clothing,
while
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people
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 in France spend 7
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percent
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per cent
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as
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apply
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the
lest
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least
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time
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 on clothing.
Finally
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,
althogh
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although
 there was a peak at 19
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percent
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per cent
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 in German for
people
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 who keep up
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with Entertaiment
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Entertaiment
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Entertainment
, other
percetages
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percentages
percentage
 changed without any orders.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, time, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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