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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph below illustrates three categories (Bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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, Bought instant
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 and Went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 )of Australian people's habits of consuming and drinking habits in five cities namely Sydney,
melbourne
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, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.
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, it can be seen that Australian citizens in the given five cities
are
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mostly went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4
weeks
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.
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, those who have bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
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 4
weeks
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 have the lowest number. Looking through the chart, nearly 64% of individuals who stay in Melbourne always purchase
coffee
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 or tea in a cafe,
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 only about 42% of them would like to buy fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 month.
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, approximately 63% of the residents who live in Hobart prefer to go to a cafeteria to have drinks in the previous month.
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, only around 38% of them are willing to buy fresh drinks. Based on the information given by the chart, Hobart has the highest number of people who like to purchase instant
coffee
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 at almost 55%, followed by 53% in Brisbane. Dramatically, both Brisbane and Adelaide have the same number of the public who are more into buying fresh
coffee
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 at 34%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, weeks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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