The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The given chart depicts the employment status of Anthropology graduates from a particular university after completing their undergraduate degree course and the table illustrates the income of the anthropologists after 5-year
work
.
Overall
, the majority of students decide to
work
full time after finishing their
study
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while
the percentage of them who
work
part time
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and concurrently
enroll
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in
postgrad
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study
was the lowest.
Moreover
, after working 5 years, the portion of
freelancer’s
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salaries is similar to state staff’s income. Beginning with the pie chart, the majority of graduates did full-time
work
after completing their degree in Anthropology with over a half
while
the lowest number of those are doing a postgrad
study
with part-time
work
at just 5%. The
figure
for part-time
work
is 15% which is quite similar to that of being unemployed which makes up 12%. The proportion of people who did
full-time
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the full-time
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job
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jobs
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and concurrently joined in
postgrad
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the postgrad
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study
and
that
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the
figure
for unknown share the same
figure
at 8%. Turning to the table, the percentage of freelancers who receive
the
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salary between 25000$ and
under
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75000$ is 20% which is similar to that of people who
work
for
government
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. 80% of freelance consultants and state staff earn over 75000$ after
5-year
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5 years of
work
.
However
, half of state employees make at least 100000$
while
just 40% of
freelancer
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did
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that. 10% of graduates
work
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who work
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for private companies
earns
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between 25000$ and under 50000$ which much lower than the
figure
for those who
gain
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over 50000$ at around 90%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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