Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. What is the reason for this? Is it a good idea to copy famous personalities?

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Nowadays, many
people
believe that famous
people
have a great
life
so they watch TV shows and read about them to follow their lifestyle, it is because they like to
successful
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like them,
while
, their real
life
is secret. A majority of
people
in society would like to follow information about famous personalities to know about their lifestyle and copy it into their own lives to be as successful as them. The normal population usually think that celebrities have secrets which they can reach by watching TV shows and reading about them,
then
do what they are doing to be one of them.
For instance
, the young generation really
enjoy
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going everywhere well-known
people
go and behaves like them when they are watching or reading about them, so they think in the future they become as wealthy and respectful as them.
However
, copying and taking the
rule
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of these celebrities is not a good opinion because it is not the truth about them.
In other words
, the population who decide to follow famous
people
by the knowledge that they are making just through some news and interviews, are making a big mistake, because, it is just a picture that
media
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the media
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wants to show
people
and is not
the
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true in their real
life
.
For example
, many famous singers and actors who are famous in modern days have an addiction to alcohol and drugs and have many problems in their personal lives. In conclusion, the majority of
people
would like to be informed about famous
people
by watching TV or reading magazines and newspapers to copy them, because they think by following their way they could be a successful person like them,
however
,
this
is not a good opinion,
while
, the real
life
of them is not showing and what
people
knowing is what media perform for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emulate
  • epitomes
  • self-esteem
  • void
  • lifestyles
  • role models
  • inspiration
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • unique talents
  • superficial
  • material wealth
  • public image
  • personal fulfillment
  • ethical values
  • constructive
  • personal growth
  • values
  • philanthropy
  • resilience
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