Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. What is the reason for this? Is it a good idea to copy famous personalities?

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Nowadays, many

people

believe that famous

people

have a great

life

so they watch TV shows and read about them to follow their lifestyle, it is because they like to

successful

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like them,

while

, their real

life

is secret. A majority of

people

in society would like to follow information about famous personalities to know about their lifestyle and copy it into their own lives to be as successful as them. The normal population usually think that celebrities have secrets which they can reach by watching TV shows and reading about them,

then

do what they are doing to be one of them.

For instance

, the young generation really

enjoy

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going everywhere well-known

people

go and behaves like them when they are watching or reading about them, so they think in the future they become as wealthy and respectful as them.

However

, copying and taking the

rule

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of these celebrities is not a good opinion because it is not the truth about them.

In other words

, the population who decide to follow famous

people

by the knowledge that they are making just through some news and interviews, are making a big mistake, because, it is just a picture that

media

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the media

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wants to show

people

and is not

the

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true in their real

life

For example

, many famous singers and actors who are famous in modern days have an addiction to alcohol and drugs and have many problems in their personal lives. In conclusion, the majority of

people

would like to be informed about famous

people

by watching TV or reading magazines and newspapers to copy them, because they think by following their way they could be a successful person like them,

however

this

is not a good opinion,

while

, the real

life

of them is not showing and what

people

knowing is what media perform for them.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. What is the reason for this? Is it a good idea to copy famous personalities?

Fully explain your ideas

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