Task 1 The diagram below shiws the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1

The diagram below shiws the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the procedures of
swetener
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sweetener
production, from
sugar
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cane transforming to candy forms.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are seven stages to producing
sugar
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, where conventional ways are combined with modern and automatic machines from the beginning until the final process.
To begin
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with,
sugar
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cane which has grown between 12 to 18 months is harvested by a harvesting machine or through a conventional way collected by hand. After that,
sugar
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cane is crushed by a crushing machine and the output is in Juice forms.
Following
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this
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, the juice is purified by a limestone filter and
then
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the result is evaporated in an evaporator chamber at a high temperature to transform juice becomes syrup. In the subsequent stage, the syrup is processed by a centrifuge device in order to separate its
saccarin
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saccharin
saccharine
crystals from the syrup.
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, the Crystal Sugars are placed in containers for the drying and cooling process and
then
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ready to use as
sugar
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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