The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the status of UK graduate and postgraduate students after finishing their
studies
in 2008, rather than having a full-time job.
Overall
,
it is clear that
most of the students from both
type
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types
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of
studies
continued to pursue higher education after their graduation
,
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while
doing voluntary work was the least
favored
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choice.
According to
the data, pursuing
further
studies
were
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the most
favored
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favoured
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preferences
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by 29,665 people of graduate alumni and 2,725
postgraduates
. Their second
preferences
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were
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doing part-time work, as chosen by 17,735
graduates
and 2,535
postgraduates
.
Furthermore
, there were 3,500
graduates
and 345
postgraduates
who became volunteers after
graduated
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.
On the other hand
, there were
also
several alumni who were unemployed after
graduated
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during the period. There were 16,235
graduates
and 1,625
postgraduates
. Interestingly, the proportion of the four statuses, which are pursuing
further
studies
, having part-time and voluntary work, and unemployed, by
graduates
and
postgraduates
fell at the same rate.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words studies, postgraduates, graduates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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