Many people prefer ta watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could do this? Should government financial support to local films industries.
Foreign
films
are watched by people
rather than local films
. There are many factors affecting this
matter but government
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the government
are
in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
church
of supporting local Correct your spelling
charge
films
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film
producing
in each country.
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produced
Today's
, many Change noun form
Today
people
especially new
generation watching foreign Correct article usage
the new
films
are significantly
/Replace the adverb
significant
increadiably
increasing. Correct your spelling
incredibly
First,
when local products are not supported by state
and even producing Correct article usage
the state
low quality
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low-quality
production
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products
leading
to Wrong verb form
leads
decreasing
the number of Replace the word
a decrease in
people
watching local movies
. Also
, foreign movies
which
are Correct pronoun usage
apply
producing
based on modern Wrong verb form
produced
idea
and Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
people
even youngsters like watching movies
which offer high quality
production based on Add a hyphen
high-quality
director's
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the director's
attitudes
and they are not censored and Fix the agreement mistake
attitude
original
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are original
movies
. Second,
if not supporting
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support
actors
and not allowing
them to play whatever they want and make strict roles, they will not produce or offer Wrong verb form
allow
movies
which in turn reducing
local Wrong verb form
reduce
films
and negatively have
impact Unnecessary verb
apply
on
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apply
this
industry.
Government
can take some measures to motivate Correct article usage
The government
people
to support local movies
. First local films
should be supported by government
to help Add an article
the government
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the films
films
industries grow since it would help increase Fix the agreement mistake
film
people
thoes
who Correct your spelling
those
watching
local Wrong verb form
watch
films
and this
is a great way to make money for actors
by selling produced films
and generally improve cooperation with foreign actors
to transfer our culture and traditions, even the way they are thinking. Second positive growth brings many benefits and enhance
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enhances
actors
and actress
incentive. Fix the agreement mistake
actresses
In other words
, they can create job opportunities by making different kinds of films
, Correct pronoun usage
that bring
bring
suitable for Verb problem
are
diversity
of age groups.
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a diversity
As a result
, many people
are keen on watching foreign films
and this
would a
severe problem if the Add a missing verb
be a
government
does not support local films
, so this
issue needs to be consideredSubmitted by bahman.faezi on
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relevant specific examples
Make sure to include clear and specific examples to support the arguments made. For instance, mention specific foreign or local films and reference any relevant data or studies if available.
clear comprehensive ideas
Focus on maintaining clear and comprehensive ideas throughout the essay. Be concise and ensure each paragraph clearly connects to the main topic.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow of your essay. Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, and avoid ambiguous sentences. Consider using more cohesive devices like 'furthermore', 'in addition', 'nevertheless', etc.
complete response
The essay addresses the task and attempts to provide reasons and solutions. The importance of government support for the local film industry is well noted.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction mentions the main topic, and there is a conclusion that summarizes the main points, providing a complete structure to the essay.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite