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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart gives information about the number of specific university subjects chosen by female and male students namely
science
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, mathematics, social,arts, humanities, literature and law in 2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most selected courses by women were social sciences, languages and art. Meanwhile, the greatest number of men had chosen
science
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 and mathematics. Humanities were identity for both genders.
To begin
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 with,
science
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 was the high ranking choice for boys at around 27000 pupils,
while
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 girls were above 9000 students. Followed by mathematics and literature which were approximately 18000 and 16000 students respectively.
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, languages and arts achieved the lowest attendance rate for boys which were about 3000 and 4000 respectively. In terms of girl gender, social
science
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 witnessed the greatest number of girls almost 24000.
While
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 maths reached the least attended ladies by around 3000. Humanities was the same for both genders at approximately 12000 pupils.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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