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The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main ifeatures, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main ifeatures, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided table shows the three shops' sales (Vancouver
Georgia
Street
, Vancouver
Dunsmuir
Street
 and Vancouver
Drake
Street
).
In particular
 categories
such
 as
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 number of eat-ins, take-aways and value transactions.
Overall
, it can be seen that
Georgia
Street
 was the highest achievement branch,
while
Drake
Street
 had the least amount of selling.
Moreover
,
Dunsmuir
Street
 had the lowest average valuation. In more detail,
Georgia
Street
 was the greatest valued store among the rest which received 854 dealings. Followed by
Dunsmuir
Street
 which experienced 750 numbers of transactions,
while
Drake
Street
 witnessed a rock bottom among shops which was 390. In terms of
a
Correct article usage
the
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 number of eat-in and take-away transactions, it can be shown that
Georgia
Street
 was the most successful bakery which had 405 numbers of eat-in and 449 takeaway deals.
However
,
Drake
Street
 was the worst selling which was 200 numbers of
eat-in
Correct your spelling
eat-ins
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 and 190 takeaway deals.
In contrast
 with transaction prices
Dunsmuir
Street
 was the least amount of money that was $5.61.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words georgia, street, dunsmuir, drake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average sales
  • branch
  • location
  • performance
  • comparison
  • trends
  • sales figures
  • sales numbers
  • distribution
  • revenue
  • turnover
  • differences
  • similarities
  • sales performance
  • temporal patterns
  • fluctuations
  • highest
  • lowest
  • contributes to
  • unexpected trends
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