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The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main ifeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main ifeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table shows the three shops' sales (Vancouver
Georgia
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Street
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, Vancouver
Dunsmuir
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Street
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 and Vancouver
Drake
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Street
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).
In particular
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 categories
such
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 as
a
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the
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 number of eat-ins, take-aways and value transactions.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Georgia
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Street
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 was the highest achievement branch,
while
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Drake
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Street
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 had the least amount of selling.
Moreover
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,
Dunsmuir
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Street
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 had the lowest average valuation. In more detail,
Georgia
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Street
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 was the greatest valued store among the rest which received 854 dealings. Followed by
Dunsmuir
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Street
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 which experienced 750 numbers of transactions,
while
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Drake
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Street
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 witnessed a rock bottom among shops which was 390. In terms of
a
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the
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 number of eat-in and take-away transactions, it can be shown that
Georgia
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Street
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 was the most successful bakery which had 405 numbers of eat-in and 449 takeaway deals.
However
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,
Drake
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Street
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 was the worst selling which was 200 numbers of
eat-in
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eat-ins
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 and 190 takeaway deals.
In contrast
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 with transaction prices
Dunsmuir
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Street
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 was the least amount of money that was $5.61.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words georgia, street, dunsmuir, drake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average sales
  • branch
  • location
  • performance
  • comparison
  • trends
  • sales figures
  • sales numbers
  • distribution
  • revenue
  • turnover
  • differences
  • similarities
  • sales performance
  • temporal patterns
  • fluctuations
  • highest
  • lowest
  • contributes to
  • unexpected trends
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