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The line graph below shows the average height of women born between 1946 and 1996 in European countries.

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This
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 line graph shows the average women's
height
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 in European countries between 1946 and 1996.From
this
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 graph, there are the
Netherlands
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,
Latvia
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,
Sweden
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 and France.For the
Netherlands
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, from 1946 to 1972, women's
height
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 went up a
lot
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 but after 1972, it started to go down.In
Latvia
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, the average woman's
height
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 is going up.
lot
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 from 1946 to 1996 without stopping or going down.For
Sweden
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, from 146 to around 1972, it went up a little and after 1972 it started to go down a
lot
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. At the
last
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 for France, it is going up a little by each year from 1946 to 1996.From
this
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 graph, most of
countries'
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the countries'
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 average women's
height
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 except
Latvia
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 changed a
lot
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 from 1972 to going down or going up.In 1946 the highest average woman
height
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 was the
Netherlands
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 at 166cm
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, after around 1986,
Latvia
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's average woman
height
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 became higher than the
Netherlands
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. For
Sweden
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, the average
height
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 in 1996 was lower than in 1946 which means that
Sweden
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's average
height
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 went down the most than the other 3 countries.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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