The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive decelopment while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. other hand,

Traveling
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has been part of the human race
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centuries until date. Technology has improved the way of traveling making it easier for man to
travel
around without stress with the manufacturing of cars, airplanes and boats. In recent times
traveling
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by air has become one of the fastest means to get
rom
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from
one point to the other in less than a couple of hours.
Moreover
, the
increase
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avaliability
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availability
of inexpensive
airlines
has seen a
numerous
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growth of
travelers
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.
While
some feel
this
a positive
developmet
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development
other
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others
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dispute
of
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this
.
This
essay is going to discuss both the positive and negative
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and
aslo
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also
provide the writer's opinion on the subject. On
one
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the one
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hand, the
low-cost
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low cost
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of
airlines
let's
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people
travel
around the world.
This
helps in the generating of revenue for the economy of the
countries
since
people
are more appealed to
travel
without hesitation . As
a
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saying goes little drops of water
makes
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a mighty
oceans
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.
Thus
, the more
people
travel
due to
the inexpensive airline fares the more revenue is created.
In
addition
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it provides
people
to
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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to see historical places or
travel
to places they dream of.
For example
, a person may want to
travel
to Dubai to
go
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experience the city but since the price or
airlines
are expensive they can't go,
in contrast
when the
airlines
become cheap they are able to go and
fufill
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fulfil
their dreams.
On the other hand
, it can cause
over population
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overpopulation
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and depopulation in
ceratain
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certain
countries
.
For
instance
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most
people
from
the
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apply
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underdeveloped
country
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countries
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all
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want to go to developed
countries
to strive for a better life but since the
airlines
are expensive they can
afford
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afford them
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, but when the opposite occurs they are able to
leabe
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leave
their country and go to
this
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developed
countries
.
Thus
, causing a
raise
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rise
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in population and high inflation in the
countries
they go to. In conclusion, I think
surge
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the surge
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in low-cost
airlines
serves making it easier for
people
to
travel
around the world is a positive development. Even though every individual has their own opinion on whether
its
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it's
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best to have low-cost
airlines
or not.
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task response
You covered both sides of the argument fairly and gave your opinion in the conclusion.
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Your opinion

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