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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In the first chart,
energy
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 usage is divided into several categories: heating (42%),
water
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 heating (30%), other
appliances
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 (15%),
refrigeration
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 (7%), lighting (4%), and cooling (2%). Heating and
water
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 heating dominate
energy
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 consumption, together accounting for 72% of the total
energy
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 used. The second chart details the greenhouse gas
emissions
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 resulting from
this
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energy
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 consumption.
Water
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 heating is the largest contributor, responsible for 32% of
emissions
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.
This
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 is followed by other
appliances
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 (28%), heating (15%),
refrigeration
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 (14%), lighting (8%), and cooling (3%). Comparing the two charts,
while
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 heating consumes the most
energy
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, its contribution to greenhouse gas
emissions
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 is significantly lower at 15%.
Conversely
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, other
appliances
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, which use 15% of the
energy
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, generate a disproportionately high 28% of
emissions
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.
Water
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 heating,
although
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 using 30% of the
energy
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, has the highest
emissions
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 at 32%.
Refrigeration
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also
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 shows a notable disparity, using 7% of
energy
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 but contributing 14% of
emissions
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that the relationship between
energy
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 use and greenhouse gas
emissions
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 is not directly proportional, with certain categories like other
appliances
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 and
refrigeration
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 being more emission-intensive relative to their
energy
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 consumption.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water, appliances, refrigeration, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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