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The maps below show the town of Langley in 1910 and 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the town of Langley in 1910 and 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Both maps displayed how Langley Town was in 1910 dan 1950, there is a huge difference
for
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in
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 its layout. In 1910, there
are
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 two wastelands, a factory,
railway
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a railway
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 workers’ cottage,
railway
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a railway
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 line, and quite a few townhouses. Over the period,
this
 city has had a huge makeover for its urban planning.
For example
, in 1910, Jordan
Street
 was not integrated into
Sherman
Street
 because there
are
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 townhouses between them. In 1950, townhouses were demolished into three huge flats and both streets
are
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were
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 connected;
nevertheless
, there is a new
street
 that
are
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was
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 constructed between 1910 and 1950 that
are connect
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connected
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Sherman
Street
 to
new
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the new
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 store compound. The railway line and wasteland were demolished and changed into the biggest open space in Langley,
it
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 is called
Sherman
 Park. They planted a group of trees and built a pond in the middle of the park,
thus
 there
are
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is
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 a new children's playground
in
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on
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southeast
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the southeast
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 side of it. The factory in the north part of the city was knocked down and changed into lavish
Sherman
 Mansions, the laundry and café were expanded using the wasteland area in
northeast
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the northeast
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 side of the city. In conclusion, Langley Town was converted from
factory
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a factory
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 zone to
more
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a more
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 sophisticated area for families.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, sherman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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