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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of urban citizens in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020, with the expected
population
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 in 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, it can be easily seen that all four countries
has
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have
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 a dramatic rise in
population
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, starting at the lowest point in 1970 and being projected to reach the peak in 2040. Malaysia and Indonesia saw a
slightly
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 rise in
population
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, respectively from 30 to about 45 and around 12 to over 20 percent from 1970 to 1990. After that, both countries
has
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 climbed rapidly until now before being predicted to continue increasing for the next 20 years.After almost remaining in the 70s,
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippine's
Philippines'
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 percentage increased dramatically to reach about 47 percent
on
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in
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 1990 and dropped to 40% in 2010.
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,
this
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 country faced
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 rise in 2020.Meanwhile, Thailand reached
approximate
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approximately
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 30% in 1990 and saw not much
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 until 2020. Both two countries are projected to increase in
population
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 in 2030 and 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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