You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following topic: Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Recently,
instead
of working for a company or organization,
people
prefer to be self-employed. I believe
this
phenomenon happened because
self-employed
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the self-employed
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offers great flexibility
although
it
also
needs
skills
and
time
to achieve
a
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great success. The following paragraph will explain
about
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the reason why
people
choose to be self-employed
along with
its disadvantages. To be
a
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self-employed means that
people
can get flexibility in the way they work. Nowadays, one of the major factors that increase the trend of self-employed is the advancement of technology
such
as
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the internet
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internet
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.
This
situation
make
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makes
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it possible for individuals
such
as
a
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freelance
designer
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designers
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to find their clients directly from all over the world and connect with them from anywhere.
Therefore
,
people
do not need to commute to their office daily so they can save their money and their
time
for their family.
Not to mention
that going to the office
also
requires
much
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energy.
Moreover
, working in a company
also
means that employees should follow the rules
such
as paid leave and overwork which
is
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are
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sometimes very strict and hard to
be implemented
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implement
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.
However
, to be
a
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self-employed requires great
efforts
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effort
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especially
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, especially
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in the beginning.
People
need to master certain
skills
to convince their clients to work with them which
is takes
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takes
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certain
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a certain
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amount of
time
.
Furthermore
, after mastering specific
skills
, individuals
also
need to build their branding and reputations through their great portfolios.
However
, building a great image is not really a simple job because it requires much
time
, effort, and consistency. Indeed, to get the first customer
of
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is a pretty challenging job. Sometimes,
initially
,
people
even offer their
skills
for free just to get a chance to build their portfolios.
Not to mention
that the competition is extremely challenging and the payment sometimes is too low especially in the initial year so not all
people
able
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are able
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to survive and be successful in certain fields. In conclusion, individuals nowadays prefer to be self-employed because it offers flexibility but it
also
requires much effort to survive and
success
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succeed
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.
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Grammar
Ensure grammatical accuracy by refining sentence structures. For example, instead of 'self-employed offers great flexibility,' it should be 'being self-employed offers great flexibility.'
Task Response
While the ideas are clear, aim to enrich the essay with more specific examples or data to support the arguments made. This strengthens your position and makes it more compelling.
Coherence and Cohesion
Avoid minor repetition to maintain reader engagement. For instance, instead of repeating 'requires much time, effort,' you could rephrase it to maintain variety.
Structure
The essay has clear and well-organized paragraphs that enhance readability.
Introduction and Conclusion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the discussion and sum up the key points sufficiently.
Task Response
The main points are relevant and adequately supported with logical reasoning.
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