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The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table displays information about a bakery brand’s selling information that contains
number
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a number
the number
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 of transactions, transaction values, number of eat-in and take-away transactions, and
most
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the most
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 popular item of each three different branches located in Vancouver
Street
 in 2015.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
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the Vancourver
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Vancourver
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Vancouver
 Georgia
Street
 branch had the highest average selling value among the other outlets. It produced more than $10.50 from over 850 orders with Chicken Burger as the customer’s favourite menu. Unlike
Vancourver
 Georgia
Street’s
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Street
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, as the second biggest profit producer,
Vancourver
 Drake
Street
 branch only had 390 transactions and became the least popular among the other shops.
Moreover
, Chicken Pasta was frequently chosen by customers here .
Nevertheless
, despite
of
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apply
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a
big
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large
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 number of
purchase
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purchases
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 about 750 orders,
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the Vancourver
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Vancourver
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Vancouver
 Dunsmuir
Street
 branch only generated
a
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apply
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slightly over $5.50
of
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apply
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transaction
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the transaction
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 value.
Additionally
, it is Chicken Wings that played
the
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an
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 important role
for
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in
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 its profit.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, vancourver with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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