Today's young generation is facing many problems in school and at home. What are the problems? What can parents do to help their teenage children?

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Nowadays, humongous teenagers have
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plenty of
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both in school and at home. The causes of the
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are too many learning materials and
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some unproductive lifestyles. To handle the issues
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parents
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have to give motivation for their
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and understand
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them. In
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we will discuss related to that. On the one hand,
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generation
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issues because they have to focus on numerous lessons in
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school.
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, the lessons are difficult to understand, so that they are frustrated and give up to learn.
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, the student can not finish their homework.
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, their teacher will be mad
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, they do some unproductive activities at home.
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, they tend to spend too much
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for open their gadget to do some internet activities,
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as playing games and scrolling social media. So that’s why they do not have adequate time to study.
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, the solution of the student
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must be managed by their
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some ways.
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give motivation again and again to maintain
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of their
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advice smoothly to the kids.
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what the
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want,
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the
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the class, ask the
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with
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feeling, do you enjoy
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children
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answer the question and
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how to solve their
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era younger people find
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plenty of
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between in school and at home because they have a lot of lessons that they do not understand. In order to help the students,
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have to
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motivation
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and
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them.
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language
Try to use more academic language and avoid informal expressions such as 'humongous.'
coherence
Ensure you clearly divide your essay into paragraphs with clear main points. This will help improve the logical structure.
task response
While discussing solutions, give more specific and feasible examples.
task response
You have properly addressed the topic by discussing both the problems teenagers face and the solutions parents can offer.
coherence
You made a good effort to structure your introduction and conclusion, which provides a nice framework for your essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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