Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views and give your opinon.

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protection for them.

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of the species.

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the wildlife.

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will provide education for children who want to learn about wildlife and

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society for

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learning

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to many things that we can provide when

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of several

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elephants

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and others.

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people

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go to

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can get many benefits like they more love the

animals

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animals

in the

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people

want

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hunt the

animals

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everyone

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about the

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