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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
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A glance at the graph provided reveals the use of fish and
some
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various kinds of
meat
 in a European country over 25 years from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that by far the highest amount of consumption of
meat
belongs
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belonged
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 to people who
eat
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ate
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 chicken in 2004. In stark contrast, the lowest amount of use of
meat
 goes to people who eat fish in 2004.
According to
 what is shown, it is interesting to note that the consumption of two types of
meat
,
such
 as lamb and beef, fluctuated slightly but the trends have been downward from 1979 to 2004.
In contrast
, the use of chicken fluctuated gradually but the trend has been upward.
Furthermore
, it is noteworthy to note that the trend of fish somewhere in the vicinity of had no changes from 1984 to 2004 except for a slight decline from 1979 to 1984.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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