Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:  Say why you would like to go on the trip  Suggest what you could do to help during the trip  Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and high spirits. I am writing
this
letter to respond
you
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back that I'm willing to go on a
trip
organised by your school for children, and I
also
want to thank you for inviting parents for
this
trip
. Actually, I've always wanted to go to Disney
world
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but never made a
trip
even though I've
visitied
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visited
Florida a number of times.
Last
year, we went to Florida but, unfortunately,
due to
some
constrcution
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construction
work going on the way
of
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Disney
world
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resrticted
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restricted
our
trip
. Plus, next year, I'm going to attend some business meetings in
this
city,
therefore
, making
visit
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to
this
place in advance can make me more
fimiliar
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familiar
with the main roads and streets. Paying a visit
along with
children can really provide them accompany of a responsible person who can take care
their
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of their
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all needs whether it is related to eating
home made
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homemade
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food which may they miss during the absence of parents or any medical support. Not only
this
, as I've visited
this
place a number of times,
therefore
, your school would not need to hire any tour guide for some places. I would really appreciate your assistance in providing details of accomodations,
transportations
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, and
also
when we are going to start
this
trip
. Plus,
also
tell me the place
form
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from
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where you will pick all the parents and
childrens
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children
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, your support would be valuable. I look forward
for
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your prompt response, and happy to see you. Yours Regards, Amanjot
kaur
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.
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suitable writing tone
Ensure consistent use of formal language and correct any informal phrases or inaccuracies.
single idea per paragraph
Consolidate related points into single paragraphs for better flow and coherence.
complete response
Double-check for grammar and spelling errors to enhance clarity and professionalism.
greeting and closing
Good greeting and closing, which adds a personal touch and maintains formality.
complete response
You have provided a complete response by addressing all parts of the task: your desire to go, how you can help, and questions about the trip.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic
  • valuable experience
  • expertise
  • educational objectives
  • supervision
  • ensure safety
  • bonding
  • workshops
  • logistics
  • coordinates
  • travel arrangements
  • clear communication
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • manage schedules
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