Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situationsuch as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is often held that accepting a bad
situation
, such
as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is the best way of dealing with a crisis. While
some argue that it is better to try and improve such
situations. This
essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter.
On the one hand, by accepting an unsatisfying situation
we make sure that nothing changes for the worse, due to
the lack of our intervention. Sometimes by fighting for better conditions
we make a Add a comma
conditions,
situation
even worse, for example
by being too aggressive or not being cooperative. People
who think that it is better to keep their heads in the sand are not willing to take that risk,
and prefer to keep living in the same Remove the comma
apply
situation
as before. Another argument for this
way of dealing with awful circumstances is being afraid of what other people
may say and destroying our work or school relations. I am a student, and I know several professors that you can not cooperate or negotiate with because of their sturdy characters. For
example
you think that you did better at a test but the teacher thinks Add a comma
example,
otherwise
. After that
the tutor remembers that you were not cooperative and Add a comma
that,
makes
your life harder for the rest of the school
Wrong verb form
made
On the other
hand
by fighting for the best outcome you can completely turn your Add a comma
hand,
situation
180 degrees. Many people
who want to use us just pray that we will not compete for our rights, for
instance
a bad boss who does not want to give us a raise without a purpose. By talking to that man you give him a reason to give it to you, by applying pressure on him. You Add the comma(s)
instance,
also
might get more respect by standing up for yourself. People
tend to be friendlier towards others who know what they want and how they can fight for it. By doing it you might find yourself a group of people
who will stand by your side in these tough situations. You will also
gain self esteem
and be more sure about what you wanna do in the future
In my perspective, fighting for what you want to achieve is better than doing nothing and agreeing on everything, Add a hyphen
self-esteem
due to
self respect
and living a better life.
In summary, it is important to choose yourself before others, and we do it by trying to improve our living and working conditions. Sometimes doing it makes us pick up risks on the way but it is worth it.Add a hyphen
self-respect
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