The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
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The following diagram illustrates how the hydroelectric
power
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station
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converted
water
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into
an
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electricity
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for public usage.
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, it can be clearly observed that the
electricity
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is generated by the means of
water
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turbulence and the swirling of turbines from the
water
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in
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higher and lower
altitude
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which
runing
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running
back and forth both during day and night in order to create a
constistent
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consistent
current of energy.
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with, the dam located
in
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on
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a higher level
is acted
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acts
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as a gate
inwhich
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that
control
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controls
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the flow of the
water
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to the
station
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. During the day, the dam
let
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lets
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the
water
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run toward
to
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the
power
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station
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at the bottom level where there is a reversible
turbines
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inside the plants. The flow of the
water
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that
past
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passes
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through the turbine to
low
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the low
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reservoir
create
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creates
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a physical force that the generator inside the
station
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converted
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converts
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it into
an
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electricity
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and
sending
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sends
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it to
national
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the national
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grid through the
power
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line.
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at night, the
water
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now
pumping
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pumps
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back to where it
begin
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from the lower
resovoir
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reservoir
passing through the turbine once again.
This
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means that the
electricity
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can be
generate
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generated
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all day making
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hydroelectric
power
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a
high efficiency
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an alternative natural
resources
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resource
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, water, electricity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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