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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016
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The graph
demonstrated
Verb problem
shows
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 how much money
spent
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was spent
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 and received
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by children’s
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children’s
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children
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 in the USA within a year. The information on the chart the highest
revenue
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come
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comes
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 from donated food but the most expense to
program
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 services for children’s
charity
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charities
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. The donated food
top
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tops
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 the list for
revenue
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 with 86.6 percent. The investment income and government grant have similar
percent
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per cent
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 and
also
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 the lowest
percent
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per cent
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 in
revenue
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 sources. The other income
closely
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is closely
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 followed by Government grants. The community contributions
leads
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lead
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 the way among the other
revenue
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 sources except donated food. The average
figures
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figure
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 is the
program
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revenue
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 for income. Another major factor the Management
program
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 services is superior points for each category in expenditures. The fundraising
show
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shows
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 average figures between
Program
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 services and management. The Management and General the lowest
point
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points
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 for each category in expenditures.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, program with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • charity
  • non-profit organization
  • funds
  • revenue
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising
  • expenditure
  • allocations
  • administrative costs
  • program services
  • beneficiaries
  • financial year
  • breakdown
  • percentage
  • portion
  • sector
  • philanthropy
  • budgeting
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