The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000.

The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000.
The line graph illustrates what proportion of spending was allocated to categories of goods and services in a European country between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
,
although
the expenditure on food and leisure
initially
ranked first for almost the entire
period
, they were overtaken by
transport
spending over the
last
years.
In contrast
, the figure for energy remained the least significant throughout the
period
. In the first year, the expenditure on food was about 33%, after which it experienced a slight drop of 3
percent
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before decreasing significantly to about 14 %
at the end
of the
period
. The proportion of spending on leisure was
initially
20%, which was followed by a dramatic fall to about 14% in 2000, though it was overstripped by
transport
in 1990. The figure for
transport
was
initially
almost as high as that for
transport
(around 10 %).
However
,
while
the former increased gradually as it reached approximately 15
percent
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in the
last
year, the latter saw a considerable decline, as it hit
initial
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figure for energy in 2000. The share of expenditure on energy stood
last
throughout the
period
, as it had decreased to a little above 1% by 2000.
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