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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagrams depict the process of contributing energy by a wave-energy machine and its location.
Initially
, the
water
 flow enters the device directly, which causes a change in the
water
 level inside.
Next,
this
 change causes the movement of the
air flow
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airflow
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, which in turn causes the turbine to rotate, turning the movement into
electricity
 using
electricity
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an electricity
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 generator.
Thereafter
, the
water
 returns back to the sea with the help of a nearby drain.
Following
this
, the second diagram provides information about
dependence
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the dependence
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 of the range and price of the installation on the output power of the wave-energy machine.
Thus
, the
further
 away from the shore the machines are located, the more power will be generated from the waves.
In contrast
, a closer location will lead to a significant reduction in the generation of
electricity
 from waves.
Overall
, there are five main stages in
the
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electricity
generating
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generation
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, starting from
water
 levels, and ending with returning
water
 to the sea.
In addition
, the second picture gives information about
installation
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the installation
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 location of these machines.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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