The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart compares the expenditure of weekly income of families in an unknown country between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, a big proportion of money was spent on food in 1968;
however
, in 2018,
highest
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the highest
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percentages of expended money were for housing and leisure. In 1968, 35% of the weekly salary was used
in buying
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to buy
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food;
however
, six decades later, the figure fell by half. Weekly allowance for clothing and footwear
were
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was
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double that of the value in 2018, at 10%.
This
trend was the same for personal goods, where it was 8% in 1968 and 4% in 2018. Families in 2018 expended between 19% to 22% of their weekly
earning
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earnings
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on housing and leisure,
whereas
in 1968, it was 10% and 8% respectively. People, in 2018, spent more on transport than in 1968;
however
, the figures for household goods were
same
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the same
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in both years at 8%. During both periods, money utilized for fuel and power was fairly similar at about 5%.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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