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3.In many countries, criminal novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime drama?

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 trend with my own opinion.
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audiences
. Typically,
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 work of art often presents puzzles and complex narratives that engage audiences, satisfying their intellectual stimulation and suspenseful storytelling.
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,
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 explores deeper themes and social issues
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 as justice, morality and the human condition. By
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 into the complexity of
crime
 and its consequences, it can spark thought-provoking discussions and encourage viewers to reflect on ethical dilemmas and social injustice.
Furthermore
, those novels and dramas usually spend lots of effort to create
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characters
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 their own feelings
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characters
.
for example
, the stories usually spend one to two chapters to demonstrate
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criminals
. Personally, I
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this
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 both positive and negative influences on society. On the side,
this
 work of art can be a useful source of education for people. To be more specific, it can enhance human awareness of
crime
, alerting them to the potential misconduct which might happen in reality.
However
, on the downside, people who spend most of
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 spare time on
crime
 fiction can potentially increase
crime
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 rate. People may think is
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brave to disobey the law and
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illegal
legal
 action can be
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 to become a symbol of free will.
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task response
Make sure to fully address all parts of the task by more clearly providing examples and explanations for the trends you are discussing.
coherence cohesion
Improve the coherence by ensuring each paragraph flows logically with clear transitions between ideas.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, giving the reader a good sense of beginning and ending.
supported main points
The essay attempts to support main points with relevant examples, such as discussing character development in crime fiction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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