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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The given graph and table provide information about the average monthly temperatures and the total number of
hours
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 of sunlight per
year
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 in three major cities i.e. London, New
York
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 and Sydney.
Overall
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, it is evident that New
York
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 received the maximum number of
hours
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 of sunshine annually, 2,535
hours
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 precisely. At the beginning of the
year
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, the temperature of Sydney was higher than the other two cities, around 25 approximately, which stayed consistent until the end of March when a drop in climate could be noticed.
Whereas
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, weather in London and New
York
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 was different than the former city, kicked off the
year
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 with roughly 5 and 10
hours
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 of sunshine respectively which gradually increased and experienced the highest temperature in the middle of the
year
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.
In contrast
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, Sydney recorded a drop in temperature in the month of July. The city witnessed a rise
in
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immediately in the next month and the weather started getting hotter towards the end of the
year
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. A sudden decline in climate conditions was recorded in New
York
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 and London after the mid-yearyear and people experienced a similar environment as they did at the start of the
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, year, york with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • temperature fluctuations
  • range
  • significant differences
  • average number of hours of sunshine per year
  • highlight
  • relate
  • patterns
  • comparisons
  • major cities
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