IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Brendan,

#trip #friend #photographs #photograph #copy #addresses #brendan
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I hope you are doing well and have recovered fully from the flu, you caught after our trip. I am writing
this
 letter to ask you to send me the
picture
 we have taken on the
rigde
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ridge
ride
 in Shimla. I need that particular
picture
 in which we were acting
that
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like
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 we were falling from the ridge though it was not that high and it was the camera angle that gave
illusion
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the illusion
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 that we were standing at a height. I need that photo by next
tuesday
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 as I want to send that
picture
 to a newspaper which is running a campaign on friendship day. They have asked to send a recent
picture
 of you with your best friend showing the craziest thing you have done together and
whats
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 better than that
picture
.
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 I remember
,
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 we were laughing our
heart
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 out and enjoying every bit of that moment.
That is
 why, I
also
 took
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a print
the print
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print out
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printout
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 of that memory to frame it, but yesterday my dog, Oreo, tore that photograph when I was away for my music class. I was sad but
then
 I
remember
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 you
also
 have a copy of it, so thought to write you a letter. Now, do send me
the
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 copy of that photo as soon as possible as I need to get it
print
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printed
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 and send it to the newspaper.
Also
, write me after you post it. I will see you soon. Give my regards to
uncle
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Uncle
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 and
aunty
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Aunty
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. Love Bindiya
Submitted by bindiya.gupta01 on

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coherence cohesion
Consider using more concise sentences to improve clarity and flow.
task achievement
You might want to slightly refine the explanation about the necessity of the photo for the newspaper campaign to be even more compelling.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a clear and friendly tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of your letter are appropriate and create a personal touch.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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