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The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011

The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011
The line graph shows the six different meat consumption – chicken, beef, duck,
veaf
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beef
veal
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, pork, and goat - in Spain from 2001 to 2011. The vertical figures represent
grams
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 per person per week. One notable thing is that chicken consumption skyrocketed and remained
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high from 2003.
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 number rose from about 450
grams
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 in 2005 to almost 900
grams
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 in 2011, which almost doubled over the course of
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 time
period
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.
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 was followed by pork despite the stagnation from 2007. Beef was the most purchased among six meat at the beginning of the time
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, but it started to decline
sharpely
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sharply
 from 700
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 to under 500
grams
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,
duck
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 experienced a decline steadily.
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, veaf and goat were the lowest preferred meat in the country and none of them even
exceed
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 300
grams
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 throughout the whole
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. Those
are
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fluctuated around 100
grams
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 and 200
grams
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.
Overall
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,
this
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 graph clearly shows that chicken consumption continuously increased from 2001 and 2011,
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 other meats experienced increases and decreases over the time
period
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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