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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given map illustrates the similarities and differences
of
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 the village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 between 1995 and
present
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the present
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 time. It is clearly seen that
map
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the map
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 of the village changed.
Thenumber
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The number
 of
housers
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houses
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 has increased. Now, turning to the details, the village of Ryemouth has changed
from
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since
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 1995. There are more houses now than
1995
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in 1995
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 on the
north-west
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northwest
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site
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side
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. The large territory, which is
on
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east-north, was used for farming and walking in
forest
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the forest
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at
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 the early 90s.
However
, nowadays it is smaller and it
becomes
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area
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an area
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 for playing golf and tennis. It can be seen that
,
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 there were shops and
fish
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a fish
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 market on
west-south
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the west-south
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 site near the road. After some years, they were removed from
this
 area and restaurants and
appartments
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apartments
are
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were
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 built
instead
 of these shops. People could fish
on
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 fishing
port
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ports
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. But, there are no chances to take fish at the present time.
Moreover
,
cafe
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cafes
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 are
stil
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still
 working.
Car
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The car
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 park is added near the hotel.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • main road
  • housing development
  • farmland
  • forest
  • golf course
  • tennis courts
  • fishing port
  • apartments
  • commercial services
  • supermarket
  • local shop
  • consumer needs
  • cafe
  • hotel
  • tourism
  • recreational facilities
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • priorities
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