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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Both maps display the infrastructure from 1995 to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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. Digital changes took place in the countryside.
This
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 map is more residential. There are fewer trees and leisure facilities changed. The government reconstructed the industrial state and modernized facilities. They removed the fish market and replaced them with
an apartments
Correct the article-noun agreement
apartments
an apartment
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 beside the sea. The car park was constructed next to the hotel. The shops in the southwest of the town
was
Change the verb form
were
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 demolished. A fishing port expanded over the sea. There forest park
cut
Add a missing verb
was cut
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 down and replaced with a tennis court. The farmland replaced
golf
Correct article usage
the golf
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 court. The tennis courts opened on the southeast. The most noticeable additions are
there
Correct your spelling
their
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 4 housings. Apart
form
Correct your spelling
from
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 the road, the café remains the only feature to remain relatively untouched, it appears to be used for eating.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • main road
  • housing development
  • farmland
  • forest
  • golf course
  • tennis courts
  • fishing port
  • apartments
  • commercial services
  • supermarket
  • local shop
  • consumer needs
  • cafe
  • hotel
  • tourism
  • recreational facilities
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • priorities
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