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The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumption.

The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumption.
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The
chare
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chart
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 provides information about trends in US
beef
,
pork
,
broilery
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broiler
broilers
, and
turkey
 and
consump
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consume
 of
poutory
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poetry
poultry
 from 1955 to 2017.
Overall
, it is evident that beet and
pork
 fluctuated significantly over the fifty-seven-year
period
,
whereas
 broilers
were
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gradual increase
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at
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during
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 the same
period
.
In contrast
,
turkey
 was much
stable
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 compared other three types. In terms of
beef
 and
pork
,
beef
 shows much
fluctuated
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 than
pork
,
espectially
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especially
 from 60
pounds
 in 1960 to 90
pounds
 in 1976,
While
pork
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the pork
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was fall
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 slightly
at
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in
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 the same
period
. After 1982,
pork
 shows stabled from 45
pounds
 to 43
pounds
,
by contrast
,
beef
 was marked decline from 72
pounds
 to 50
pounds
at
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in
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 the same
period
. Regarding broilers and
turkey
, broilers
were
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surged stablely from 15
pounds
 in 1961 to 57
pounds
 in 2012.
Moreover
,
brolers
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brokers
broilers
was
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increased suddenly to 60
pounds
 in 2006, between 1979 and 2006.
In contrast
,
turkey
was
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slight
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 rose from 10
pounds
 in 1986 to 15
pounds
 in 1991.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, pork, turkey, period, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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