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The graph below shows the consumption of four types of dairy products in the USA from 1970 to 2010.

The graph below shows the consumption of four types of dairy products in the USA from 1970 to 2010.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of cheese, full-fat
ice
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cream
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, low-fat
ice
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cream
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 and yoghurt eaten by each individual annually in the USA between 1970 and 2010. Units are measured in
pounds
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.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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 of cheese and yogurt increased
whereas
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 the amount of full-fat
ice
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cream
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 consumed decreased. Interestingly, the
consumption
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 of low-fat
ice
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cream
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 remained fairly the same. Analysing the line graph
further
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, about 8
pounds
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 of cheese and 1 pound of yoghurt were consumed by each
person
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 in 1970. The former increased sharply throughout the given period peaking at around 23
pounds
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 per
person
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 by 2010. The
consumption
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 of the latter,
however
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, showed a gradual upward trend till 2000, after which it climbed dramatically to approximately 8
pounds
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 per
person
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 in 2010. With regard to full-fat
ice
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cream
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, just over 10
pounds
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 was eaten by each individual in 1970,
this
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 figure over the next four decades depicts a slight downward trend decreasing by approximately 2
pounds
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 per
person
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 by 2010.
On the contrary
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, the
consumption
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 of low-fat
ice
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cream
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 was just under 5
pounds
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 per
person
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 each year and it remained the same with minor fluctuations in the given time period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ice, cream, pounds, consumption, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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