The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give

 nformation on the police budget for

 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.

 I'he table shows where the money came

 From and the charts show how it was

 distributed.

 Summarise the information by

 selecting and reporting the main

 Features, and make comparisons where

 relevant.
The table illustrates the founders of the budget for police and the pie charts compare three different fields
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the police distributed the
money
in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, the amount of the invested
money
increased slightly in 2018 with the largest amount coming from the National Government. It spent the most on salaries, followed by buildings and transport and technology whose spending increased dramatically. Starting with the table, the total
money
that the police gained in 2018 rose slightly to about 318
million
from around 304
million
in the previous year. Indeed, more than half of the
money
came from the National Government in 2017 and 2018 with approximately 175 and 177
million
respectively.
In addition
, the rest comprised Local Taxes and other sources with around 91 and 38
million
in 2017 and about 102 and 38
million
respectively in 2018, all of which demonstrates the general tendency the increase the amount of investment from all sources. Turning to the pie charts, salaries remained the most dominant areas with the largest investment with 75% and 69% in 2017 and 2018 respectively.
Secondly
,
while
there was a small decline in its spending, technology seemed to cost more as it rose significantly from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.
Lastly
, the proportion of buildings and transport remained stable for the two years with 17%.
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