The table below gives information about the values (NZ$) of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.

The table below gives information about the values (NZ$) of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.
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gives information about the amount of the values of
exports
of kiwi fruit from New
Zeeland
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Zealand
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to
Japan
,
China
,
Mexico
,
Russia
and Saudi Arabia
in
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over a 3-year period from 2010 to 2012.
Overall
,
Japan
was New
Zeeland’s
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Zealand’s
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largest
export
market during the period shown. It is
also
noticeable that
exports
to
Japan
,
China
,
Mexico
and
Russia
increased,
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and exports
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to Saudi Arabia saw an
overall
declined
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. The about given graph
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the
values
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of
export
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exports
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to
Japan
rose from $271
million
in 2010 to $325,3
million
in 2012.
By contrast
, kiwi
export
revenues that New
Zeeland
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Zealand
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earned from Saudi Arabia
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gradually from $29
million
in 2010 to only $82,000 in 2012. The trend for
China
,
Mexico
and
Russia
noticeably
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different. The values of
exports
to
China
,
Mexico
and
Russia
were
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rose,
at
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$74,9
million
, $1,2
million
and $ 0,968
million
,
repectively
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respectively
in 2010. Two years
late
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,
export
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exports
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earned from these markets
significant
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increased to $94
million
, $ 3,3
million
and $2,4
million
,
repectively
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respectively
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, japan, china, mexico, russia, export, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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