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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides information about the percentage of money spent by four different
countries
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 on food, housing,
health
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care
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, clothing and transportation during a one-year period. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, the Americans spent the most on housing
while
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 the British spent the least on
health
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care
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. Despite
this
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, all four
countries
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 spent relatively the same on clothing, In 2009, The United States spent around 25% on housing which was slightly more than the UK and Japan which stood at 24% and 23% respectively. In the same year, the spending on
health
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care
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 in the UK was less than 5%.
However
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, the remaining three
countries
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 spent relatively similar amounts on
health
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care
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. In terms of clothing, all four
countries
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 had similar expenditure figures.
Although
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, Canada and Great Britain spent a bit more on clothing. Both
countries
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 spent more than 5% on clothes.
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, the biggest expenditure for Japan was food, it was more than 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, health, care with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure proportions
  • key categories
  • emerged as the leading category
  • expenditure share
  • cultural or economic differences
  • disproportionately high
  • unique healthcare structure
  • spending habits
  • claimed the largest share
  • relatively consistent
  • devoting the smallest percentage
  • distinct distributions
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