You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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crowd numbers increase, technology
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more advanced and it
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help us in various ways.
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of them is worldwide better health
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which will
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in longer life expectancy.
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disadvantages
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. as life expectancy grows the
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amount of population increases.as
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we will need more resources to feed and provide
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necessities
necessaries
for them.
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will cost us huge amounts of time too, gathering everything and processing them isn't easy.it's good to mention that with more older people we will need more hospitals or medical
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.
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will demand much higher human resources and will face
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communities
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of enough
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on the other
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we can get more emotional support because we can share more time with our elderly loved ones.
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not forget the impact they have when they guide us through their own
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experiences
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.it's always helpful to get
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which can us
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more clear path to go. in
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we might struggle with gathering resources or
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result
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of increased life expectancy but we will get to see our loved ones longer and use their
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guidance
through dire times.
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The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of increasing life expectancy.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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