Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, investigations which are an important factor for evolution need

money

. For these

funds

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funds,

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a group of

people

believe scientific research ought to get

money

from governments

instead

of commercial organizations. I broadly subscribe

this

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to this

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view because when both of them get funds for surf,

then

they improve society. On the one hand, when the

government

finance

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finances

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a project,

then

this

project is for the country;

as a result

, the benefits of

this

project are for

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the country

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country

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country's

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inhabitants;

moreover

, these kinds of

projects

which

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the authority

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authority

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authorities

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get

money

for

them

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apply

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are things that can improve citizens lives. To illustrate, in my country the

government

investment

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invests

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the

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apply

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projects

which are

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that

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work on devices that can

decline

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reduce

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water and air pollution;

therefore

, these things help

people

to have safer lives.

On the other hand

, massive companies must spend

money

for

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projects

which can develop their goods or make new tools which help

people

to have a better living.

In other words

, these ways help manufacturers to produce devices with high quality, less

money

, and have good profits for

financer

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financers

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;

however

, if the

government

spend

money

for

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these

projects

have some demerits.

Firstly

, governments do not have a lot of

money

for handling

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to handle

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all of the

researches

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research

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;

hence

, most of the investigations do not have

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good

result

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results

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Secondly

, when the

government

spend

money

for

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projects

then

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and then

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sell

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sells

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these

projects

to firms costly;

besides

price

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the price

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of things climbs

from

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apply

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another way.

To conclude

, for some reasons which I mentioned both governments and commercial organizations have to spend

money

for

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scientific

projects

which help them to get their services to

people

better.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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