The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
The line graph compares the
amount
of annual
visitor
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visitors
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spend
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spent
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in New Zealand from different 5 countries over the period of 18 years between 1996 and 2014. In general, the country that spends the biggest
amount
of money
was
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Australia,
while
China spends the least one.
Firstly
, in 1996 China spent the least
amount
of money
inNew
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in New
Zealand which is nearly 0,
while
UK and Japan spent as much as each other (nearly 500).
However
, by 2002, the gap in spending between these two countries
was
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definitely changed.
Expenditure
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The expenditure
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of Japan increased to 1000 and
expenditure
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the expenditure
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of
UK
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the UK
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decreased to 100.
Moreover
, as we can see from the graph, in 2008 the
amount
of money which was spent by Australia, China and Japan reduced rapidly.
However
,
USA
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the USA
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and UK grew up. In the period between 2008 and
2014
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2014,
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there
was
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fluctuations in the
spend
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spending
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of
whole
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the whole
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5 countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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