The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
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The line graph provided demonstrates how many
students
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from Iran, Turkey and Greece were admitted to Sheffield
University
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from 2005 to 2009.
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, Greece and the other two countries diverged evidently in student
enrollment
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.
Greek
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students
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enrolled at a slower pace,
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more and more Turkish and Iranian
students
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entered the
university
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. In 2005, Sheffield
University
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enrolled
much
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more
Greek
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students
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than those from any other country listed, from 180 to less than 40.
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,
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freshmen rapidly diminished to approximately 70 in 2007, by which Greece was overtaken by Iran and Turkey in
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. Afterwards,
Greek
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student
enrollment
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continued to slide, to about 30 in 2009. The
enrollment
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of Iranian
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grew in parallel with that of Turkish
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by 2008, when the former began to soar. In 2009, Iran became the largest source country as 160 Sheffield
University
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freshmen were Iranian, a striking rise from less than 40 in 2005. The number of Turkish
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who enrolled in the
university
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also
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saw a considerable increase, from around 20 in 2005 to over 120 in 2009.
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