The pie charts compare the amount of online shopping sales for retail parts in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Moreover, those are divided into four categories: travel, film/music, book, and clothes.

The pie charts compare the amount of online shopping sales for retail parts in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Moreover, those are divided into four categories: travel, film/music, book, and clothes.
The pie charts illustrate the distribution of retailers' online sales in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013 regarding four categories.
Overall
, it is evident that
while
this
figure for film/music and books faced
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significant growth, that of travel and clothes dwindled. In 2003, travel accounted for 36% of the
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, making it the greatest contributor. After a decade,
however
,
this
figure experienced a fall, reaching a percentage of almost 30%. In terms of film/music sales,
although
they contributed to a mere 20% in 2013, they surged 10%
further
and outrunned Italy at more than a third of sales. Moving on to books and clothes, the rate at which the former was bought online remained somewhat unchanged, at approximately 20% in both years.
In contrast
, that of the
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dropped dramatically from slightly above 20% in 2003 and 16% in 2013, providing the lowest proportion.
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