The most important aim of science shold be to improve people's lives.
There is no denying the fact that
science
could develop our live
.Replace the word
lives
while
there is commonly
held belief that Correct article usage
a commonly
science
crucial aim is Change noun form
science's
improve
Change the verb form
to improve
improving
people
lives, there is Change noun form
people's
also
an argument opposes
it. in my opinion, I consider Wrong verb form
opposing
science
shouldn't just develop our live
but Replace the word
lives
also
improve the whole plant
.
On one hand, one of the main aims of Correct your spelling
planet
science
is develop
Fix the infinitive
to develop
environment
and tourism .Correct article usage
the environment
In other words
, one of the developed countries Japan use a robot assist to clesan
the parks and streets Correct your spelling
clean
witch
makes a great benefit for Correct your spelling
which
environment
and Add an article
the environment
make
a great clean and healthy place for tourists and local Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
.In addition
, there is a study made in china
Capitalize word
China
2018
that without the development Change preposition
in 2018
on
Change preposition
of
medicine
industry and Correct article usage
the medicine
science
in general the
life would be much harder. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, chemicals and treatment
that we apply these days Fix the agreement mistake
treatments
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
on
Change preposition
apply
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
on
Change preposition
in
positive
way and Add an article
a positive
makes
Correct subject-verb agreement
make
people
live with
good health for a long period.Change preposition
in
also
these treatments Capitalize word
Also
not
only for Add a missing verb
are not
humans
but, all creatures on the plant
, Correct your spelling
planet
science
provide help to rare animals avoid them to extinction using some medicines.
Correct word choice
and science
On the other hand
. the world have
seen the effort and benefits of Change the verb form
has
science
on
creating new jobs Change preposition
in
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
on
the Change preposition
in
last
decade. it is also
possible to say that, science
give
Change the verb form
gives
humans
chance
Correct article usage
a chance
to
various occupations and industries, there Change preposition
in
is
a lot of jobs nowadays that didn't exist Correct subject-verb agreement
are
on
the past.Change preposition
in
Moreover
, science
develop
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develops
the
Correct article usage
apply
convenient
in various ways for Replace the word
convenience
humans
. for instance
, technology that applied on
the Change preposition
in
last
century phone
, cars, electricity etc. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
humans
live with
Change preposition
in
most
convenient way.
In Correct article usage
the most
conclusion
despite Add a comma
conclusion,
people
have
different views,I believe that Wrong verb form
having
science
could aim to improve many sectors and industries also
could develop Correct word choice
and also
individuals
livesChange noun form
individuals'
individual's
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grammar
There are several grammatical mistakes that need to be addressed. Make sure to use the correct tense and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'develop our live' should be 'develop our lives' and 'aim is develop' should be 'aim is to develop.'
coherence
Improve the logical flow between ideas. Instead of saying 'On one hand...On the other hand,' make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
examples
Elaborate on your main points with more specific examples and explanations. For instance, instead of just mentioning Japan using robots for cleaning, discuss how this impacts the broader context of living standards and environmental health.
content
The essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and takes a strong stance on the issue.
content
You mentioned relevant points such as the role of science in environmental conservation and job creation, which are well-thought-out areas.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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