In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish. They cause and lanwater d pollution, and so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

These days
pollution
has gone completely viral. So some people think that the main source of rubbish is
the
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plastic
shoping
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shopping
bags
. the real question is, does
the
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plastic
bags
are the primary cause of rubbish? In
this
essay
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I will discuss both sides and will draw my personal
conclousion
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conclusion
conclusions
. On one hand, what
cause
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causes
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pollution
? It is not essential that
the
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plastic
bags
are the dominant cause of
pollution
.
For example
, factories may be the
castive
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case
casting
reasone
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reason
reasons
of
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for
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water and land
pollution
.
Hence
the belief that
the
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pollution
has one main
cuse
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cause
is wrong.
On the other hand
, there
is
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are
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many sources of
pollution
. We can not say that if we stop using
plastic
bags
,
then
pollution
will end. To illustrate, a lot of
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
and supermarkets
replace
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have replaced
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the use of
plastic
and they
start
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have started
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using
cartoon
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cartoons
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instead
. But ,
still
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still,
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the problem did not
solved
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!
In addition
, I think that as a human being living
in
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this
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plant,
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plant
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planet
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we should take care of
oure invironment
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our environment
. By
replace
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replacing
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things that are harmful to the environment. For
an
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instance, prevent smoking and factories toxic
smokes
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. In
conclution
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conclusion
, I believe that
the
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shoping
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shopping
plastic
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for plastic
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bags
are
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is
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not the main reason
of
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for
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water and land
pollution
. Of
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course
cource
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cource,
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we should stop using them but that does not mean that the
pollution
will be solved.
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task achievement
Your essay introduces the topic and attempts to discuss both sides of the argument, which is good. However, you need to delve deeper into each perspective and provide more specific examples and detailed analysis to strengthen your response.
coherence cohesion
There are several grammatical errors and typographical mistakes in your essay. Pay attention to sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay needs to be better organized. Ensure each paragraph presents one clear idea or perspective, followed by evidence or examples. Your arguments tend to drift, which makes it hard to follow your line of reasoning.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion should summarize the key points discussed and restate your opinion more clearly. Currently, it feels a bit abrupt and lacks a strong recapitulation of your main arguments.
coherence cohesion
Watch out for typos and misspellings, such as 'shoping' (shopping), 'reasone' (reason), 'castive' (causative), 'cuse' (cause), 'resturant' (restaurant), 'cartoon' (cardboard or carton), 'conclousion' (conclusion), and ‘plant’ (planet). Proofreading can significantly enhance the readability of your essay.
task achievement
While your intention to include examples is good, ensure that they are relevant and clearly anchored to your arguments. This will make your claims more convincing.
task achievement
Your determination to explore both sides of the argument shows a balanced approach and is commendable.
task achievement
You exhibit a clear understanding of the topic and the importance of addressing environmental issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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