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In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish. They cause water and land pollution, and so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In the era of globalization, shopping is the
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business
 of the era. We can see a lot of people are spending money any time in buying.
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the prime cause
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of ruining
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 our environment.
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 of
major
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utilize
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 of
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plastic bags. I strongly agree with
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 statement. In
this
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 with, Plastic materials are
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harmful
equipments
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. It can not be
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by
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short
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 time.
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, a diverse range of less developed countries are dumping it in landfills
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then
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 burning it.
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 method can demolish our atmosphere and can
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raise
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the
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global warming.
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, China is one of the biggest countries around the world,
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however
 they more the primary reason
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 the global
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warming
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 the rapid
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 of blastic materials.
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, we can see an array of individuals are spending
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 time
in
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 the beach. They
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there
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 trash
in
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 the beach.
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,
this
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 can make the rubbish
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proliferated
 in the ocean and demolish a lot of sea
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 lives.
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, America
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wonderful
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beaches
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,
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 most of them are ruined
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palstic
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plastic
 bags. It floated on the sea and made the
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sunlight
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 not
access
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 to
tdeep
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deep
 areas, which killed a lot of animals and terminated a massive space of corals sea. In conclusion,
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the government
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plays
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more
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 vibrant and vital role
to
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decline
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 issue. It should ameliorate
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citizens
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citizens'
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 awareness. It
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the
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careless people. Ultimately, it should use
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recycled materials to
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diminish
this
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world wide
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worldwide
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 issue.

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coherence cohesion
The essay needs to have a clear and structured introduction that outlines the main points that will be discussed. The introduction provided gives some background but is somewhat disjointed.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use more cohesive devices (e.g., moreover, therefore, as a result) to ensure a smooth transition between ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to elaborate on the main points with clearer explanations. Some arguments are briefly mentioned but need more detailed support to strengthen them.
task achievement
Be careful with spelling and grammar. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'bussniss,' 'blastic,' 'there' instead of 'their') that distract from the content of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and that this idea is clearly stated at the beginning of the paragraph.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a clear commitment to addressing the task and recognizes the environmental issues caused by plastic bags.
task achievement
Relevant examples are provided to support main points, such as the mention of China and America in illustrating plastic pollution impacts.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Persistent pollutant
  • Biodegradable
  • Eco-friendly alternatives
  • Environmental impact
  • Land pollution
  • Water pollution
  • Reusable bags
  • Public awareness
  • Consumer behavior
  • Economic impact
  • Public policies
  • Innovation
  • Education and incentives
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