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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar chart depicts variations
on
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in
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Health
Services
, Educational and training, and
Air
Pollution
 issues for inhabitants in seven cities in
UK
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the UK
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 (Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, Manchester, Glasgow, and London) in
year
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the year
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 period 2008, with
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an
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x-axis from 0% to 70%.
Overall
, Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff and Manchester had the
most
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highest
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 proportion
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of issue
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issue
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issues
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 in
Health
services
,
On the other hand
, Glasgow and London had the same problem in
Eductional
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Educational
 and training with 52%.
Furthermore
, Newcastle had a proportion
52
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% in
Health
services
 with 47% in Educational and training
along with
 5% in
Air
Pollution
,
In addition
, Belfast had 58% in
Health
services
 and 52% with 8% in
Air
Pollution
,
While
 Birmingham had 54% in
Health
services
 and 52% in Educational and training with 9% in
Air
Pollution
, Therefor, Cardiff had 58% in
Health
services
along with
 51% in Educational and training with 12% in
Air
Pollution
,
Moreover
, Manchester had 51% in
Health
services
 with 45% in Educational and training and 11% in
Air
Pollution
,
Finally
, Glasgow and London had the same rate in Educational and training with 53% in
Health
Services
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, services, air, pollution with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant issue
  • high percentage
  • real estate market
  • traffic congestion
  • transportation issues
  • urban areas
  • health services
  • dissatisfaction
  • healthcare facilities
  • crime rates
  • safety
  • law enforcement
  • education and employment issues
  • job market
  • educational systems
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