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Band 3

In many countries, people do not recycle waster materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

#countries #people #waster #materials #bottles #newspapers
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Yet, climate change problems are the most
peril
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 problems. There are many causes
such
 as lack of
awareness
 and concern for the environment.
Although
, there are several solutions
and
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in my opinion there is one solution
could
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that could
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 make
the
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society
 more
concern
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 and careful
for
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about
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 the environment. It can
observe
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 that these days there are many problems related to
the
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habitats.
The
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Society
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society
misunderstand
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misunderstands
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 the importance of
recycle
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recycling
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 because of
lack
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a lack
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awareness
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of awareness
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. To be more specific, I know an adult friend
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who throw
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throw
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threw
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 the
bottel
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bottle
bottles
 in
public
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a public
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 street without feeling guilty and that related to information shortages about peril and the danger that
happend
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happened
happens
happen
 to our
society
 because of
this
 small
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Moreover
, there is a fact
said
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that people focus on their own
life
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lives
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 without thinking about public interest and social responsibility.
Furthermore
, there are a lot of solutions to spread
awareness
 and enhance
recycle
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recycling
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idea
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ideas
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. That
cand
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can
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happend
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happened
happens
happen
 if we focus
in
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on
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 these
process
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processes
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:
Firstly
,
conducting
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by conducting
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 a large number of environmental
awareness
 and recycling campaigns.
Secondly
, presenting several ideas related to
recylce
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recycling
such
 as
reused
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reusing
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 shopping plastic bags more
that
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than
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 once.
Finally
, Establishing companies that facilitate the recycling process for the general public. In conclusion,
Society
 is surrounded by ignorance about the importance of recycling, but By feeding
society
 with importance, a large part of the problem will be solved.
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relevance
Provide more specific examples to support your points. Mentioning an 'adult friend' is less compelling than giving a broader example or statistic.
coherence
Avoid unnecessary repetition and ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Linking sentences more effectively within paragraphs can improve the logical flow.
task achievement
The essay attempts to address all parts of the question, providing reasons and potential solutions.
introduction conclusion
The structure includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps in organizing the main points.
cohesion
The writer has used connectors like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' 'Finally,' which help in the organization of ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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