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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Yến linh

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In the modern era , education is one of the most factor very
essential
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 and some people think that the
government
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 should make a decision :
free
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fee
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for
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all
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for all university
students
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 even if
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economy
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 background is so bad . In my opinion , I completely agree and it will be discussed in the following paragraphs .
Firstly
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 , there are many reasons that studying
further
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 after graduating from high school is a very right path, so the
government
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 should have policies to support
tuition
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 fees, which is
also
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 a way to encourage
students
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 to continue
attend
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 university .
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 ,
this
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help
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students
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 have
difficult
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economy
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will
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and will
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 be opportunities
pursue
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teritary
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 education.
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, the
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 in Germany pays all
tuition
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 fees so
students
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 can save a portion for living expenses.
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, not having to worry about
tuition
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 fees will help
students
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 focus more on studying and research, thereby improving the quality of education and contributing more to the country. Especially graduates with high knowledge and skills will be valuable human resources contributing to their
country
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economy
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 and society.
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,
this
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 will reduce the gap in educational opportunities between different social classes, contributing to building a more equitable society. In conclusion, the
government
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 should have full
tuition
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 support for
students
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not
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 only helps individuals but
also
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 benefits society and the
economy
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.
This
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 is a list of major long-term investments in the
country
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 future. Having
such
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 good policies will
also
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 help attract international
students
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and
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apply
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create a multicultural environment and enhance cooperation between countries.
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