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Band 3

Your English speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport.write a email to your friend.In your email recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn.Explain how your friend could learn this sport.suggest that you both learn this sport together.

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Dear____, I am writing to you to suggest about new spot for sport in our town as you asked me in your
last
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 letter. As you suggested you can not communicate other than English and
this
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 place is totally new for you.I have one suggestion for the place which is quite near to your area
as well as
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 they have myriad sports facilities.The main benefit
for join
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of joining
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this
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 club is that it has
English-speaking
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an English-speaking
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 coach
as well as
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 they offer you
seven
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a
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days
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day
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 trial and you can choose whatever you want to play.From my experience I would suggest you
to
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apply
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play football as it's coach
are
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is
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 very energetic and his teaching method is incredible.
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,it is
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 open on weekends which is beneficial for your leisure time activity on weekends.
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,I
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also
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am also
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 interested in learning football with you, I will
also
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 participate in it.
This
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 thought
make
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makes
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 me keen to learn new
thing
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things
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togher
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together
. I hope,you liked my suggestion and will join as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, ___________
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grammar punctuation
Try to proofread your writing or use tools to check for minor errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'suggest about new spot for sport in our town' should be 'suggest a new spot for sport in our town' and 'thought make me keen to learn new thing togher' should be 'thought makes me keen to learn new things together.'
structure organization
Work on paragraphing to improve readability. For instance, split your email into clear paragraphs with one main idea each: introduction, recommendation, explanation, and conclusion.
content expansion
Try to expand on your ideas with more relevant specific examples. For example, why football is particularly suitable for your friend, or share a memorable anecdote about playing football.
task achievement
You provided a clear recommendation and reasoning behind your choice of sport, making the email very personalized for your friend.
personal touch
Your suggestion to learn the sport together is a good way to connect and adds a personal touch to the email.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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