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The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 pie chart depicts all of these three,profit distribution all over the world,
coffee
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production
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 and
coffee
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 consumption. It is clear from the graph that the figures are not stable.
According to
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 what is shown, consumption is divided into four categories. The first one and the highest in Europe, which comes directly after America, the rest of the world and
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 with four per
cent
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 less Japan. In detail,
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production
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the production
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 contains four countries.
With the
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 lowest proportion is Vietnam with 16 per
cent
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 and
then
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 with two per
cent
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 more comes Japan.
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 with 22 per
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Indonesia
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, the highest proportion in South Africa. Moving on, profit distribution around the world. Nearly has the same percentage as
production
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 with some differences.
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, the highest proportion of delivery comes after retailers
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 eporters and the lowest producers.
To sum up
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, we could say that
coffee
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production
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 has a close percentage , unlike the rest.
Coffee
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 consumption has two close proportions Europe and America. In
profit
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profit,
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 distribution delivery has more than half.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, production, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • coffee production
  • coffee consumption
  • profit distribution
  • highest
  • lowest
  • concentrated
  • exporting countries
  • producer
  • consumer
  • significant difference
  • largest
  • territories
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