The line graph illustrates the participation of athletes in the Winter Olympic Games from 1988 to 2004 while the pie chart depicts the participation of athletes in the Summer Olympic Games in the same period.

The line graph illustrates the participation of athletes in the Winter Olympic Games from 1988 to 2004 while the pie chart depicts the participation of athletes in the Summer Olympic Games in the same period.
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The line graph illustrates the participation of athletes in the Winter Olympic Games from 1988 to 2004
while
the pie chart depicts the participation of athletes in the Summer Olympic Games in the same period. In general, it is evident that the
number
of Summer Olympians was the greatest
at the end
of the period,
while
the
number
of Winter Olympians experienced a dramatic decline despite
an
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initial growth.
According to
the line graph, the
number
of Olympians started at 6
million
in 1988 and reached a peak of 8
million
in the 1992 Winter Olympics before plummeting by 5
million
8 years later.
Then
, the
number
of Olympic attendants witnessed a gradual fall to only 2
million
in 2004. As regards the pie chart, the 2004 Olympics recorded the highest
number
of participants, at 9
million
. Meanwhile, the years 2000 and 1988 had the second-highest (7
million
) and third-highest (5
million
) attendance levels, respectively.
By contrast
, there were significantly fewer competitors in 1996 and 1992, with the former figure being 3
million
compared to only 2
million
of the latter.
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